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A constructive suggestion: this topic is opened for everyone to write a short story on English on the topic announced. You are welcome!

What They Never Write in Schoolbooks

”The Mandalorian Wars (also known as the Mandalorian War) erupted after two decades of relative peace following the Great Sith War. The conflict was set in motion by the ambitious Mandalore the Ultimate, who reconsolidated the Mandalorian clans under the Neo-Crusader banner. Due to contradictory historical accounts from the period, the exact date of the war's beginning would remain a point of contention among historians. The wars could be said to have begun in the year 21,024 AFR*, as it marked the beginning of Mandalorian aggression, but many published histories tend to emphasize the time period after the Mandalorians invaded the Galactic Republic proper circa 21,037 AFR, after which the Republic military and a faction of the Jedi Order entered the war. It is known, however, that the openly first aggressive move against the greater galaxy occurred circa 21,034 or 21,035 AFR, against the Mid Rim world of Onderon. The wars concluded in 21,040 AFR with the Republic victory at Malachor V. The Mandalorian Wars were widely viewed as a violent prelude to the Jedi Civil War, as the two massive conflicts were closely intertwined.” **

I found this article in the schoolbook of my son ten years after the war ended. I couldn’t help staring at this short note which reminded me of my dead friends. I couldn’t believe that this was the only thing that remained in the memory of the Republic when I had seen people burning alive, whole planets explode in seconds… when I had been holding her fragile body which was trembling with the sobs.

…I was squeezing her wrist until her fingers grasping a lightsaber unclasped and the hilt fell on the floor. A hilt which she had been holding near her temple few moments earlier in the attempt to kill herself. She was a general of the Grand Army of the Republic. Kay-Si Artani, that was her name. And we went through this war – from the very beginning to its end – together. But she was not just a woman. She was a Jedi, which actually became the reason for her breakdown.

”A faction of the Jedi Order entered the war” they say. But who were those Jedi? My son will never know, because I can’t tell him. I don’t want to go through it all again… Revan, Malak, Artani – these names are nothing but a blank sound for him and his generation. And they will also never know what the cost of their happy ignorance was.

The so called ”victory at Malacor V” was a slaughter. Ships were drifting on orbit, some of them already empty for the crew was dead, other drowning in a storm of gunfire and blossoming with explosions which glinted and faded away in the vacuum. No one thought why they are fighting; the thrill of battle, this bloody veil, seemed visible… There were no victors.

…We were standing on the bridge of the flagship together. She was grasping the back of the chair and peering through the transparistill window in horror and I, pallid as ever, was waiting for her commands. I was just a captain. There was nothing I could do but wait and die when I was ordered to… Then I heard a voice which seemed to come from somewhere afar but as I woke from a stupor I recognized the voice of the weapon engineer who had been standing there unnoticed since the battle started. ”General?” that was the only thing he said. She nodded almost automatically and I knew that was the beginning of an end. One slight movement of the engineer’s adroit fingers and the weapon was activated. The bridge, the ship, whole Galaxy seemed to start shaking; three of us clutched at any stable thing we could find… And then we saw the most beautiful and horrific scene I’d ever seen in my life. All ships below us started whirling chaotically and then falling through the atmosphere to the surface of the planet. They were like butterflies which accidentally put their wings on fire flying too close to a candle… With growing speed they became smaller and smaller moving away from us… She fell down on her knees with a harrowing scream of agony.

I have never understood what the Force really is. But I know that she felt everything that those dying soldiers felt through this Force. And she was able, the one from all the Jedi, to form some kind of bonds in that Force… bonds with those whom she had led to death or victory. I remember her knowing almost every soldier by name…

She died that day. No, her body still lived but something inside it that was her was dead. I delivered her to the capital where she faced the Jedi Council and was expelled from the Order. ”Good bye, Carth Onasi”, she said. And I have never seen her again…

There are no actual victors in any war. It is only the matter of who gives up first.
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* - AFR = After Foundation of the Republic
** - Wookieepedia article used

Сообщение отредактировал Кей-Си Артани - 13 Январь 2010, 23:49

[V-Z]

I'm impressed. And till the very end for some reason I didn't realise, that it was Carth's story.
Is it only a one sketch, or will there appear others? I hope.

And as an impression...

I'm not sure, what the Republicans will write in their books about this war. Frankly speaking, I'm not interested in it - as we'll tell our children the actual story.
We.
Children.
Will I have children? Physically it's still possible, and I may find a good mate... but what a father will I become?
I served under Mandalore the Indomitable and walked through the First Republican War... ah, they call it the Sith War. Well. it was leaded by the Sith, I admit.
I served under Mandalore the Ultimate, and made my way through the Second Republican... now they call it the Mandalorian War. It's true - now there were no Sith, just our clans and Republican systems.
I waged my own little war through the Period of Dispersion, and won it at the sky over Telos. And I'm not injured, not mentally wounded, have no prosthetics. A few scars do not matter.
Some will say that I'm lucky. Some really say it.
We have a war heart, and each our crusade is a Heart War. I would be glad to say, that we suffered several defeats in Weapons War, but we've never lost a Heart War. I myself, didn't lose.
I wasn't injured, but I'd left my face at the last war. I changed it for the greatest honor and greatest burden that I could imagine, and I don't regret. I had my failures, but they helped me to meet many outsiders, who proved to be good brothers and sisters in arms, and I would like to have them at my side forever.
But they have their own path, and I walk my own. So let it be.
I wasn't injured, but the war took my face, my name and luxury of being a simple soldier.
I served under Mandalore the Indomitable.
I served under Mandalore the Ultimate.
Now I serve as Mandalore the Preserver.
To preserve, not to fight? Is it my path for the rest of my life? Probably.
As I said, I've got the greatest burden.

Сообщение отредактировал V-Z - 15 Январь 2009, 22:19

[Scarface]

народ, шли бы вы на иноязычные форумы тогда что ли? я понимаю о чем речь - но читать на доменном ру форуме америкосскую речь неприятно
давайте я тута по чувашски писать начну тогда???

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V-Z
I was wondering wether you would leave a comment. =)
Thank you for doing so.

I didn't realise, that it was Carth's story.

Yup, there is such a problem... I myself wasn't sure that I need to leave him to be Carth, because 10 years after the war his son should actually be an adult, not a school kid... But I just can't imagine anyone else on the place of this storyteller, so...
As for

Is it only a one sketch, or will there appear others?

I'm really not sure. It was actually a task for my English class - "an account of historical event" . The teacher was impressed, too. =) I got 17/18.
The thing about this scene and topic is that I'm still trying to write the story of the Exile's path through this war in Russian, so I hope it will happen and I won't have to write any more sketches on this theme in English.
But maybe with other tasks in my major some will appear. =)

And I'm impressed by yours, too. Unfortunately I'm not so quick at stories, and though a shade of a story under impression appeared in my head already, I can't express it that fast. =) BUT! this is an idea for a new sketch!

...I suggest reforming this topic in the collection of sketches of different authors on the theme!

Scarface
Ну, одна тема на английском - не так уж и страшно. А развивать язык путём творчества - очень интересно. Посему не вижу ничего плохого в том, чтобы такая тема существовала. Тем более, что правилами это не запрещено, а желающие читать и писать есть.

Сообщение отредактировал Кей-Си Артани - 15 Январь 2009, 22:59

[V-Z]

Scarface
Во-первых, это все же английский, а не "америкосский".)
Во-вторых, в подзаголовке темы честное предупреждение, что требуется знание английского.)

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I myself wasn't sure that I need to leave him to be Carth, because 10 years after the war his son should actually be an adult, not a school kid

Well, alternatively speaking - who could prevent him from having second son?)

I'm really not sure. It was actually a task for my English class - "an account of historical event" . The teacher was impressed, too. =) I got 17/18.

That reminds me of my own experience - performing a project in English as a KOTOR-like scene.)

...I suggest reforming this topic in the collection of sketches of different authors on the theme!

Why not?) We have Tales of the New Republic, Tales of the Empire... so what about Tales of the Mandalorian Wars?

(maybe that'll give me an impulse to continue my Knights' Mosaic as well... at last...)

[Scarface]

i think this theme is not so good idea as it looks like but of course it's up to you.

[Aneta Gray]

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You spelled "welcome" wrong %)

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Aneta Gray
Oh, my Gosh! O_o
Sorry!

[Герман фон Бэйн]

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V-Z
Lemme express my respect to you, lady and gentleman. ^^ You've put me under real impression. Write more, guys lol. Good job!

But now I regret that at school, when having such tasks, i didn't use SW-entourage, cuz that could be funny. xD

By the way, it's really pretty good idea to improve one's English by local and pleasant means. It would be useful for my poor language too. I'll try to be in, if you please. =)

Сообщение отредактировал Darth Bane - 3 Февраль 2009, 03:13

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Darth Bane
Thankyou for your comment.
You can post here some of your things too. =)

I'm in process of writing another little story. Soon it will appear here.